Remembering Mother

Today I discovered Five Sentence Fiction when reading this blog and decided to try my hand at writing only five sentences.

A moment of clarity in the land of the confused brought on a rush of memories both to her and to those of us visiting her.  This once vibrant, strong woman had been reduced to a pale shadow of herself under the strong grip of Alzheimer’s. Disease.  Suddenly she was once again our mother, even if only for a very short time, when she knew our names and recognised each of us. The joy and happiness was unbounded and in that short time many happy moments and happenings were remembered.  But all too soon, the veil of the Disease dropped down and once again she retreated to the confused old lady she had recently become.

Lillie McFerrin Writes

21 responses to “Remembering Mother

  1. A beautifully written piece.So much sadness in so few sentences.
    xxx Huge Hugs xxx


    • Thanks David – there were very few moments of ‘normality’ when Mother was in the ‘home for the confused’. But we certainly revelled in hem.


  2. It does us good to discipline ourselves into concision, doesn’t it? Exquisite portrait.


  3. You said so much in 5 sentences. A good exercise.


  4. Well done! I seemed much more than five sentences!


  5. So succinct. So well-written. So incredibly sad. Thanks for sharing. Hang in there!


  6. Fabulous! Those five sentences brought me close to tears. My Mom was like that -in and out of reality – and there was so much hope and joy for those few minutes in a day when her mind was clear.


  7. Alzheimer’s robs so much making those fleeting moments of clarity even that more precious.


    • Thank you Kathy for reading and commenting. I think that Alzheimer’s is one of the most stressful diseases both for the sufferer and often more so for those loved ones looking on. 🙂


  8. Good job done at your first attempt at Five Sentence Fiction! Power packed indeed 🙂


  9. So glad you found FSF! I think it is a great challenge and fun to write a story in five sentences. Your story though sad was a good example of a short, short story. I look forward to more from you.


  10. Such a terrible disease. You captured the sadness in just a few sentences.


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