Writing 101: Give and Take

Day 7 and today’s challenge is:

Write a post based on the contrast between two things — whether people, objects, emotions, places, or something else. and

Today’s twist: write your post in the form of a dialogue. You can create a strong opposition between the two speakers — a lovers’ quarrel or a fierce political debate, for example. Or you could aim to highlight the difference in tone and style between the two different speakers — your call!

I really struggled with this challenge and am not sure if I understood what the challenger was getting at but here is my attempt.

tantrum

“I will not go” she said tearfully, as she stamped her little foot.

“But you must” said her mother. “You have already promised and Suzy will be so disappointed if you don’t go.”

No response; so in her most conciliatory tone her mother offered “Tell you what, I’ll pick you up afterwards and we’ll go to Tony’s for dinner and you can choose anything off the grown up menu”

Suddenly the child was all smiles and in her most beguiling voice she said “Really? Then I’ll have oysters and an enormous hamburger, fries, ice cream and a large glass of chilled champagne to go with it”.

Huh, sometimes we are hoisted by our own petard or maybe just second guessed by a three year old child.

I wrote something along these lines in a Trifecta Challenge some time ago.  You might be interested to read it

Post script – Thanks to those who commented and mentioned that the words were a little out of the usual vocabulary for many three year olds.  I accept this constructive criticism.  I was trying to show that the little girl was copying her mother in choosing what to eat (but perhaps not the hamburger and fries).  I would have been more believable had she said something like “and a large glass of that bubbly drink that you like so much”.

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15 responses to “Writing 101: Give and Take

  1. Three year olds are very good at figuring things out quickly (usually to their benefit) Great little story.

  2. I think as parents we’ve all been there, done that. We badly underestimate the brain of a child who wants something. Great story.
    xxx Massive Hugs xxx

  3. Maybe it isn’t such a bad thing to get used to oysters early in life. But the mother did not promise grown-up drinks, did she now? Great story, Judith. Should teach any parent to be careful with what they promise! The little ones are so smart. 🙂

  4. Oooosh killer line from the 3 year old. Me likey!

  5. I had to look up petard, (caught in his own trap) cute but the child’s dialogue requesting oysters, etc. sounds too adult but perhaps that’s the point. Claudia

    • Thanks for the comment Claudia. i appreciate your point about the oysters etc but I should have made it clearer that in this (except the hamburgers and fries probably) she was repeating what she had heard her mother order. 🙂

  6. it’s nice but i do agree with some of the comments in that perhaps chilled champagne might be a bit of a reach for a child – in this context

  7. Good choice! You are always good at stories.

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